From what I received in feed back from Teddy and Josh I am in good shape and with some serious thought this paper can come out pretty good. Teddy said that if I incorporated my ideas of photoogphy into the newer paper that it would turn into a well written paper because I would be expressing my self and connecting to Carr and Kelly at the same time. Josh thinks that the quotes I used are good but if I explain why I chose them more and went into more detail about them and made the connections stronger that it would flow a lot better and I agree 100% with him on that. In one paragraph Teddy says that if I bring Kelly into the equation it would tie the 3 ideas together perfectly, the three ideas are mine, Carr and Kelly’s. Teddy likes my view of the paper witch I find very important because it is what I am trying to get to. With my quotes I plan on incorporating Kelly’s , Carr’s and mine ideas and thoughts when presenting a quote. I am going to confirm that the quote I chose will fix this box. For my conclusion I want to be able to tie all my ideas together and give a brief summarization of the paper.
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