• Approach writing as a recursive process

This screenshot is from my rough draft, as you can see the screenshot from my final copy is completely different the draft is from a in class then continued into homework and it was  journal question 17. When I was approaching revising I broke it down into chunks, to salvage parts for my revised introduction. I first changed my complete structure of my essay to persuade, include other authors and have better flow with the course work assigned. Once I did this I was able to use my cell phone after we had class discussions about them it sparked ideas into me to connect what Kelly and Carr are saying. Once this spark was created I went back into the readings to find out more. I grab bits and pieces from my own personal life to connect to Kelley. I did this on every Idea from the journal post. When I went back re read the article it changed my whole Perspective of it and I was able to make connections left and right to Carr and Kelley. 

In the highlighted screenshot I bring in Carr with a quote. After reading the passage 3 times I was able to unlock the message he is putting across, this allowed me to make self to text connections. When reading the article over I also made and browsed over comments and underlined parts of the article that I questioned.

   Overall I think this puts me into the advanced journeyman section. With restucering it is either there or it isn’t. I believe the in class discussions were a huge benefit for me and this made me a better student overall. To achieve mastery for me I think I need to get to the point I am in the first place to be honest.  

 

• Integrate ideas with those of others

I was able to make text to self connections with Carr and Kelley. This helped support my ideas, I also have clear distinctions between my ideas and other authors and helps the reader understand more.

 

In the highlighted text I use Kelleys introduction and make a deep connection with it. It took me multiple reads of the article to grasp a deep understanding of it to make a connection. In class we talked about this quote in depth and I believe this was a milestone in the project for me.

    I believe that the work I have produced in intergatreding my ideas with others puts in into the advanced journeyman level. I say this because my ideas are clearly shown different the other authors. With that said I also challenge and question other authors at the same time.

 

 

• Active reading, critical reading & informal reading response

I am going to use pictures from “Is google making us stupid ?” By Nicholas Carr and Technophilia by Kevin Kelley. While reading these articles I used a pen, highlighter and sticky notes to annotate and question the reading

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The picture above is my annotation of the first page. When first reading it I didn’t understand it that well so i questioned my reading and the article itself. This allowed me to look for answers so once I was reading it It made more sense every bit.  

 

I put myself into the advanced journeyman level for active reading. I say this because I question, annotate and explore the ideas of other authors. I dont think this would of happened if we didn’t go over the readings in depth in class.

 

• Critique own and others’ work

I am going to use screenshots of comments I left on Josh and Teddy’s project 2 drafts I address claims,evidence and organization. The in class peer review sessions helped me a lot personally. I think being able to talk with the person right in front of you makes better comments.

 

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This comment shows organization in the introduction even tho it is a primarily supportive comment. The screenshot for the comment below shows me asking questions. The evidence and organization wasn’t right for me so I had to make sure Josh knew that he needed to introduce Carr before he used his name and work.

 

 

• Document Work using appropriate conventions

I pan on using screenshots from my project 2 to show documentation of work using appropriate connections. I do this by using signal phrasing and effective quote choice.   

 

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In the screenshotted highlighted text I use a Kelley quote. I signal phrase and the quote flows well with the paper. I decided to use this quote when I made the connection with phone use and drug addicts.

 

With my work in document work with appropriate conventions I believe I am in the advanced journeyman level 3. In my project 2 I have a work cited page. This and my signal phrasing puts my into this level.

 

 

• Control individualized Error Patterns

I am going to use my project 2 for controlled individual error patterns. I used my introductions to compare the two.During this process went over the paper and added more commas to have better flow.  

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In the screenshots above are from my draft and final copy. I went back to it and added commas and changed the structure of the introductions. I did this by reading the article over again and after the insights I took from the class discussions.

 

English 122 & 123 have changed my perspective of myself as a writer. I came unto the class not having much writing confidence and skill. Once I was taught certain skills my confidence grew and my writing quality went up. I came into the course thinking I just want to get by and 8 months later I wish there was more class time to learn. The skills I learned did not come overnight, when you have any doubt about anything ask. This is one of the things I wish I did more often. I either said I’ll stop by Prof Miller or Drowns office tomorrow or something like that and I never ended up doing so. Even if it seems like a stupid question don’t hesitate to send them an email or go to there office to clarify it for you. Another thing I highly suggest going into ENG 122 & 123 is to give yourself time to write and read, some of the readings you are going to want to read 2 or 4 times over and if you don’t set away time to do so you will end up either not understanding it or only getting half of the picture. This will hurt you when you go to do the writing because you need to understand the readings to do so. Lastly I highly recommend that you sign up for a writing lab, It is 100% worth the 45 minutes each week. Not only does the lab help you with ENG 122 & 123 it will help you with any paper you need to write and you can earn a credit as well!

 

From what I received in feed back from Teddy and Josh I am in good shape and with some serious thought this paper can come out pretty good.  Teddy said that if I incorporated my ideas of photoogphy into the newer paper that it would turn into a well written paper because I would be expressing my self and connecting to Carr and Kelly at the same time. Josh thinks that the quotes I used are good but if I explain why I chose them more and went into more detail about them and made the connections stronger that it would flow a lot better and I agree 100% with him on that. In one paragraph Teddy says that if I bring Kelly into the equation it would tie the 3 ideas together perfectly, the three ideas are mine, Carr and Kelly’s. Teddy likes my view of the paper witch I find very important because it is what I am trying to get to. With my quotes I plan on incorporating Kelly’s , Carr’s and mine ideas and thoughts when presenting a quote. I am going to confirm that the quote I chose will fix this box. For my conclusion I want to be able to tie all my ideas together and give a brief summarization of the paper.

Technology in my life has forever made it for the worst or for the better depending on your personal opinion.Technology has also edited my young mind according to authors David Carr and Kevin Kelley, Carr who wrote “is Google making us dumber?” dives into the idea that the internet and google in particular are changing the way we read and process information. Carr who is very concerned about how this has affected him personally and how this is taking its toll on everyone else. Kelley wrote Technophilia a piece of writing about his thoughts on the rising technology age. Personally technology has definitely made a huge impact in my life and for the most part I believe they have been positive.

 

“Craftsmen have always loved their tools, birthing them in ritual, and guarding them from the uninitiated.” To me I can see a connection between craftsmen and teens today, the difference is that teens today have 1 tool and its called a smart phone

 

The most important/valuable technology in my life is photography. I say this because the ability to capture moments in time amazes me. Photography allows people to remember and share thoughts, things and people. It allows people to communicate without talking and has the ability to move people in unimaginable ways. Photographs are part of our legacy they show and prove what type of person you are. Without the ability to take snapshots in time my life would not be the same. We learn from our history and taking pictures is a huge factor of history. It gives the ability to show what actually happened and what it really was like. Pictures show what’s important to you for example if your camera roll on your iphone 7 is mostly pictures of wildlife and sunrises and sunsets you can assume the person enjoys the outdoors. If the camera roll has old pictures on it with family and friends you can see that family is a value of there’s it can be from pictures with your girlfriend to pictures with your cousins when you all took that family vacation 5 years ago. In life we take take things for granted like the ability to take pictures and record videos.  Being able to actually see these images and not have to rely on memory is special it has enough power to bring you to tears in some cases. Pictures express who you are as a person. For me personally taking photographs is not only a way I express myself I do it as a way to relax and take in the world from a different view. Photographs are a part of human history, they show life, death and everything in between. Photos show how far we have came and what the future holds for mankind

 

In “is Google making Us Stupid ?” Carr the author touches upon reading concentration and how people think in general compared to earlier times. The article also talks about the internet and how it has changed the way we do everything and where google wants to be in the future and what they are doing now to get there. The article speaks about how styles of research have changed and how the style of thinking and writing have followed. It shows how news articles don’t get read as much and the way to promote things is with pop ups and adds. Carr is concerned on how much people are changing. I believe he has a strong point in the fact that people reading attention span has gone done over the years. I believe there is good in this as well unlike Carr. Since we are able to read quicker by the way of scanning or skimming over, we are able to read more and process information quicker and in more quantity. This allows everyone to work faster and get more things done in a day. This is shown in our advancements in almost everything from technology to medicine. I believe this has bettered the world drastically. Although I do see where Carr is coming from when he speaks about how people can’t read as much or for as long compared to the pre internet days. I do think this is will and is hurting mankind’s ability to think and process information at a deeper level with a true clear definition. To me Carr is right on the ball with some of the points he brings up. I believe Carr could be forseeing the future with robots having too much brain power and possibly taking over, with googles drive to have the best AI in the world this concerns me. Since google is a private company they do no need to tell anyone what they are actually doing they can hide behind the corporate walls. I think that it is not okay at all that google is able to track just about everything we do on the internet and make profits off that, even though I am currently writing this paper on a google doc. I can personally can see google becoming too big and powerful to be able to knock down.  

I know I need to take out about all of the photography stuff I think I can run with the phone better. 

I believe that I think with the objects I need in that moment and love certain ones no matter what troubles they bring to me. My Iphone 7 I do not love in particular if I didn’t owe money on it I wouldn’t lose sleep if it broke. On the other hand I replaced the screen the day it broke because to me it makes 0 sense to be paying for something that doesn’t work at all. What I love about the iphone is what it can do for me, I don’t love the physical phone in particular but the things its able to do is what I truly love. I find this consiring because there will always be another phone for people to have and this love cycle may never end. On the other hand I love my jeep and it is irreplaceable to me, due to the memories and time spent with it unlike my Iphone this cannot be replaced.   

 

In technophilia by Kevin Kelley he touches on the point that most teens can not be separated from their phones, and if they do they legit can become physically sick and have withdrawals like any other addiction would bring. Kelley says “ Our identity with technology runs deep, to our core.” (Kelley 1).  Kelley and Carr have similar ideas when it comes to technology and the internet. Not only are they both considered about our love for the internet they are both worried about artificial intelligence. Carr believes that AI could possibly take over, Kelley said “ I don’t worry about computers getting smarter I worry about humans getting dumber.”  

 

Page 2: In this passage, Kelley talks about his lack of knowledge for cars. How growing up being a boy and not knowing how to tell the differences between car brands and styles. Once he went to go look at antique cars he was fascinated and intrigued by the car features. Kelley mentioned how the cars “snagged his soul” as he walked by them which was interesting.

 

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Kelley speaks about his shortage of knowledge for cars. In dives into his youth and how this shaped him not knowing the small details of cars like different models and ect. Kelley once went to a antique car show and was shown the love that people have for cars .

 

PG3 Kelley speaks on how people are so in love with machines that they even have a day to celebrate them. The author also talks about how our technophilia might be our biophilia in disguise, this makes me question how strong of a anchor technophilia is.

 

PG4 Kelley dives into his thoughts abouts dams in nature. He brings up the idea the dams bring pros and cons to its ecosystem. I agree with Kelley because some dams like the Hoover Dam are known as a tourist attraction but also have negative impacts on society.  

 

PG5 Kelley talks about his love for the internet. Kelley introduces an MIT sociologist named Sherry Turkle “calls a particular specimen of technology that is revered by an individual an ‘evocative object’. Turkle is saying that humans are driven by emotion that’s caused when we attain certain technology. I agree with this but also disagree because I don’t love my phone in particular I love what it can do for me.

 

1. Signal phrase: Nicholas Carr argues that…

Carr argues that the internet is affecting people’s reading habits. He believes from his own experiences that he can’t read the way we could. ” I can feel it, too. Over the past few years I’ve had an uncomfortable sense that someone, or something, has been tinkering with my brain, remapping the neural circuitry, reprogramming the memory. My mind isn’t going so far as i can tell but it’s changing. I’m not thinking the way I used to think. I can feel i most strongly when i’m reading. Immersing myself in a book or a lengthy article used to be easy.” Carr PG (1)

 

1. Quoted or paraphrased passage: TEXT FROM CARR (use quotation marks around the material you directly quote; be sure to provide the page number in parenthesis at the end of the referenced material from Carr e.g. (4).

Carr pg (1)

” I can feel it, too. Over the past few years I’ve had an uncomfortable sense that someone, or something, has been tinkering with my brain, remapping the neural circuitry, reprogramming the memory. My mind isn’t going so far as i can tell but it’s changing. I’m not thinking the way I used to think. I can feel i most strongly when i’m reading. Immersing myself in a book or a lengthy article used to be easy.” Carr PG (1)

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1. A discussion from your own life/experiences: TEXT FROM YOU. Think of how your views on technology and the world align or disagree with Carr.  Or, perhaps it’s more complicated. Describe an example using vivid details.

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I agree with Carr on this. I personally have seen the differences in myself over the years. For me reading has always been a struggle for me due to my learning problems. Just being able to read 3 sentences in a row before my brain or eyes started to hurt was a big deal to me, I have always been working on one flaw of my reading skills. Jumping ahead or reading too fast has always been a huge problem for me.

 

The most important/valuable technology in my life is photography. I say this because the ability to capture moments in time amazes me. Photography allows people to remember and share thoughts, things and people. It allows people to communicate without talking and has the ability to move people in unimaginable ways. Photographs are part of our legacy they show and prove what type of person you are. Without the ability to take snapshots in time my life would not be the same. We learn from our history and taking pictures is a huge factor of history. It gives the ability to show what actually happened and what it really was like. Pictures show what’s important to you for example if your camera roll on your iphone 7 is mostly pictures of wildlife and sunrises and sunsets you can assume the person enjoys the outdoors. If the camera roll has old pictures on it with family and friends you can see that family is a value of there’s it can be from pictures with your girlfriend to pictures with your cousins when you all took that family vacation 5 years ago. Being able to actually see these images and not have to rely on memory is special it has enough power to bring you to tears in some cases. Pictures express who you are as a person. For me personally taking photographs is not only a way I express myself I do it as a way to relax and take in the world from a different view. According to Carr google is making us the humans who live on this earth stupider. He believes this because of many factors. I agree with some of Carrs views but not all. I say this because I believe if you are taught how to use the internet correctly and continue to use the strategy to use it correctly I believe the internet can be a huge resource. With photography or the art of taking photos I do not believe that they are making us stupider in anyway possible. I believe photos provides expiation  and show what really happened. 

 

The insights gained from literacy narratives allow teachers to unlock their students prior successes, failures and other experiences with literacy. Literacy narratives also provide an explanation of the students decisions in reading and writing. In “ Successes, Victims and Prodigies: “Master” and “little” cultural narratives in the literacy narrative genre.” By Kara Poe Alexander she argues that teachers and professors can learn from their students literacy narratives from an cultural aspect and their pass experiences with literacy. A author I believe shares similar ideas is James Paul Gee, Gee wrote “Literacy, Discourse and Linguistics:Introduction” . In this reading Gee informs you about what a Discourse is what types of Discourses there is and how one acquires a Discourse. According to Gee  “Dominant Discourses is the mastery of which, at a particular place and time, brings with it social goods such as money, prestige, and status. Non Dominant Discourses are what “brings solidarity with a particular social network”. (Gee 8). Gee also explains on how one acquires a secondary discourse and the details of one.

I used literacy narratives from the rising chaim these narratives are all from UNE students and this allowed me to have a better connection on where they are coming from. A narratives I used was “Struggle” By Zach Biron. This narrative was about Zach’s experiences with writing essays, He previously did not have confidence in his writing ability. He was able to gain and grow confidence overtime during his senior year of highschool. He acquired a mentor, and She was his english teacher his teacher was able to show him tips and tricks on writing essays witch helped boost his confidence. I personally am a strong believer that confidence goes hand and hand with quality and motivation. I say this because in most situations if you don’t have confidence in yourself you won’t be as motivated to do it and the quality of work that is produced will be lower than a confident person. In Zach’s case his confidence was low because he was never taught how to write a quality essay, in result this lowered his motivation and quality of work. This narrative is a perfect example of what Alexander idea of  a Master narratives and little narratives  She explains that master narratives are the success stories of the child prodigy. With “little narratives” she believes they are many inside a master narrative and they give small details that help bring the story together essentially. Alexander touches on the point that she doesn’t prefer master narratives to be closed ended due to the otherside can influence the whole story. In “Struggle” Zach the main character and author, finds his mentor and his confidence and quality of work rise and he become a success. Alexander’s information is critical to my belief of the connections between Alexander’s ideas and the ones of my own. I say this because in order to gain a better understanding of a student is the ability to connect to them on a one on one basis.With assigning literacy narratives they are able to gain this further understanding this also allows them to have the student produce better quality work because they could start to understand where you the teacher is coming from. Not only will this be able to let teachers connect to their students it can reflect on that students decisions they make in the classroom. From sitting in the front or back, not talking a lot in class and work production and quality. I believe there is strong connections between Gee and Alexander. One connection I see is between Gee’s secondary discourse idea and Alexander’s little narrative belief. In Gee’s secondary discourse he informs about how this can be how you get a job and or a career. To get a career you first need to find a master of that subject. After this you need to have some type of apprenticeship with that master to understand the little things needed to be done to be part of that discourse. This can be the little things from clothing, hand gestures and how you present yourself to that discourse.

Another rising chaim literacy narrative I picked was “The Giving Tree and Me.” By an anonymous author from the University of New England. The narrative was about a young girl and her experience with a certain book, “The Giving Tree” By Shel Silverstein. This book was a huge factor in this young girl’s relationship with literacy. This not only influenced her confidence but allowed her to have a strong foundation in reading. “My father taught me that in order to understand books I would read, or be assigned to read, I would have to put aside my dislike of the author’s writing. I had to learn how to follow the story being told with an open mind. I had to learn to put aside my frustration with the author and instead focus on the story being told.” This is a way that the author was able to understand the importance of reading and how to deal with readings that she particularly didn’t enjoy.

In They say, I say  chapter 3 The Art of Quoting can teach many valuable tips. Throughout the chapter many helpful insights on quoting can help me in various papers that I will write in college. This chapter explains framing and quotations and how not to leave a “dangling” quotation. This section also shows why writers need to introduce their quotation and to give a good explanation on what it means and how it connects to their writing. This chapter explains why it is good to give a clear and meaningful explanation while using quotes. This chapter also helped me to look for unclear and dangling ones that I can fix. In this chapter of They say, I say is very beneficial to any paper that has to deal with quotations. It showed me to give full and meaningful explanations to my quotes and how to look for ones to correct. This skill I learned will not only help me write my paper better but help me grow as a writer overall. In some of my past experiences with quotations I have struggled, I was always too worried about repeating myself and sounding like an unseasoned writer. This chapter has gave me a clear approach on how to introduce quotes and how to give them greater detail. In chapter 3 it shows not only how to quote the right way it also shows the wrong way to quote witch  I think is very beneficial because I learn best If I see the wrong way to do something as well. Overall this chapter is very beneficial to me as a writer overall, It has shown me tips to become a better writer in general.